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repentyourselfaway

repentyourselfaway


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PostSubject: Sick   Sick Icon_minitimeTue Sep 25, 2007 10:15 am
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I’m sick of the lies that repeatedly come out of your mouth
And the stupidity of me to believe them
Blinded by love, but that won’t last long
Because of the pain you caused me

I’m sick of giving you so much affection
And not receiving much in return
I opened up my heart to you; Making myself vulnerable
Something I’ve always been afraid to do, and won’t anymore

I’m sick of hearing your voice
And your pleas of forgiveness
But most of all I’m sick of the heartache I have over you
Which I know will never completely fade away



yea i've really been in the writing mood recently lol
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herdarkerside




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Join date : 2007-09-25

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PostSubject: Re: Sick   Sick Icon_minitimeTue Sep 25, 2007 2:40 pm
your good!!keep them coming..cause
i looove reading them..
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repentyourselfaway

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PostSubject: Re: Sick   Sick Icon_minitimeTue Sep 25, 2007 3:09 pm
k...ill post another, but only cuz ur requesting me to Very Happy
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[jasmin]




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Join date : 2007-09-24
Age : 34
Location : batangas city, philippines

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PostSubject: Re: Sick   Sick Icon_minitimeWed Sep 26, 2007 3:20 am
wow! another one that i can relate to...nice...
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Applejellie




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Join date : 2007-09-26
Age : 34
Location : California

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PostSubject: Re: Sick   Sick Icon_minitimeSat Sep 29, 2007 1:51 am
VERY WELL DONE!!
i almost got all teary-eyed on this one...
i love how you extended it....
it seems like you really were in a MOOD at the time.
LOVE IT LOVE IT. elephant
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Gloomforever




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Join date : 2007-10-10
Age : 40
Location : somewhere in Poland :p

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PostSubject: Re: Sick   Sick Icon_minitimeFri Oct 12, 2007 1:04 pm
Full of power... special type... When I read it second time I felt more pressure from every first section starting from *i am sick of*... I guess the perfect effect would give recitation of your poem... Yeah... poetry is good way to change every emotion into remrkable art Very Happy ... Good job... Very Happy
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