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Applejellie



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PostSubject: Tell me,Tell me   Wed Oct 10, 2007 1:01 am

tell me,tell me.
is it truly possible not to believe?
tell me,tell me.
you haven't forgotten about me.
i'll stand up straight and i'll look you in the eyes
i'll get in your sweet face and i'll ask why
how could you tell me you loved me and lie?
oh please...
please tell me,tell me....
am i the girl you dream of at night?
am i the girl you want to hold?
do you see me when you close your eyes....
you asked that i never give up on us
and yet....you were the one who said goodbye
so tell me,tell me...
when can i see
tell me when can i see the look in your eyes,
the look that told me you were always gonna be mine?
with a push and a shove no i won't stop there.
i will put up the biggest fight
i won't ever give up,i promised i never would
tell me tell me....
do you really think i'm fine and i'm doing good?
and do tell me..
have you forgotten what i meant to you completely?
tell me. Crying or Very sad
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PostSubject: Re: Tell me,Tell me   Wed Oct 10, 2007 2:06 am

Tha's really good. It would be awesome if those were lyrics to go with music, it's like catchy and emotional, really nice i talk too much.
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Applejellie



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PostSubject: Re: Tell me,Tell me   Thu Oct 11, 2007 4:03 am

you really think so???
wow!
thankss....
yeah it was SUPPOSED to be a song,actually!!!
(maybe someday it will!)
Like a Star @ heaven
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PostSubject: Re: Tell me,Tell me   Thu Oct 11, 2007 10:11 am

awwww...
looove it...
it is catchy..you get a star for that one.. Like a Star @ heaven
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Gloomforever



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PostSubject: Re: Tell me,Tell me   Thu Oct 11, 2007 2:23 pm

Hey.. its song for sure... and I bet it will be if some doubts Razz ... its too good to be lost... Very Happy
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Applejellie



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PostSubject: Re: Tell me,Tell me   Thu Oct 11, 2007 7:37 pm

if some doubts???
what does that mean???
well!!!
anyway.....
i'm gonna change it a little so i can see if i can make it into a song.....
thanks for the acknowledgement though!!!
you guys are soo sweet for commenting on it......
i think it's one of my best..
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PostSubject: Re: Tell me,Tell me   Sat Oct 13, 2007 1:08 pm

Laughing ... yeah... someone must have some doubts... cos it is posted in poetry... nothing big... nothing to worry... and yup... upgrade it... cos it has power... now make it shine Very Happy
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Applejellie



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PostSubject: Re: Tell me,Tell me   Mon Oct 22, 2007 4:45 am

POWER!?!?!
Laughing
SHINE!!!!????!?!?!!!!!!!!!!!!??????
lol!

you're funny.
and really nice.
thankssss...............
haha.
maybe song will be better..?
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PostSubject: Re: Tell me,Tell me   Fri Oct 26, 2007 12:43 pm

Haha Very Happy ... Yup... All is up to you Razz ...
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PostSubject: Re: Tell me,Tell me   Sun Oct 28, 2007 2:43 am

oh.....
well we'll see i hope.
LOL*
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PostSubject: Re: Tell me,Tell me   Sun Oct 28, 2007 3:31 am

^^^ hmmm... this post had to be written fast Suspect ... hehe... not much life in it Rolling Eyes ... smiley dont work lol! ... onyl few words Razz ... only hoping geek ... girl flower ... how is your mood lately? scratch Smile
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PostSubject: Re: Tell me,Tell me   Sun Oct 28, 2007 3:50 am

pale
i'll tell you my mood.
thanks SO MUCH for asking.

well you know when you open presents during holidays,
you're hoping the one you open will be what you've always been waiting for?
when you open it,
Suspect
eyes wide open in nevousness.
you're hoping SO much for what you wanted.
you open it,heart beating rapidly..
and... Shocked
it's NOT what you REALLY wanted,
but a VERY cheap version of it?
you don't know what to say,
because you're incredibly disappointed in the gift,
but you're grateful someone thought of you to get it?

that's what i feel.
i keep thinking of my ex.
i was PROMISED i would be satisfied with what i had been waiting for,
a chance at love for the first time.....
then,
it fell apart on me.
my hopes were shattered.
i was like... affraid
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PostSubject: Re: Tell me,Tell me   Sun Oct 28, 2007 1:26 pm

Desire... better look for better version of him... He seems so faulty that is unable to upgrade Wink... Unless you have chance and know how scratch ... Meanwhile lady Razz ... wait for another present to come lol! ... or think its your day everyday and look for it by yourself Smile ... Wishing you fun and success... Yours jocolor... my queen Wink
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PostSubject: Re: Tell me,Tell me   Mon Oct 29, 2007 6:53 am

Cool Cool Cool Cool Cool Cool Cool Cool
oh.
he's completely hopeless.
I'M MOVING ON!! cheers

yay!
so anyway.
write another poem,Bob!!
you write well..
and it seems you're the only person to reply on my stuff anymore.
i MAY stop writing altogether in here.......
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PostSubject: Re: Tell me,Tell me   Mon Oct 29, 2007 2:56 pm

MAY... I like this month Very Happy... Well... instead I have beautful and colourful Autumn now Razz ... and... Desire... they dont have much time... and so crazy heart like me Razz ... so... I think... you will come back... at least sometiems I love you silent tongue rabbit Wink Rolling Eyes Very Happy
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