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Applejellie



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PostSubject: The Baby   Thu Sep 27, 2007 2:20 am

this is just a day.
it's actually in the night when Avarin is walking alone in a dark alley.She's wondering what she should do because she ran away from home and she has nowhere to go.She's deeply afraid but is confident that she will be fine.She's pregnant at just 15 and she told her father,to the point where he slapped her and she took off.
that day was horrible.
She just found out her first love,the only one she'd ever love,died in a drive-by shooting.He was innocent,and harmless,but he fell silent.
Soon after finding out,she had to tell her father her condition.
So she ran knowing he would not be there for her and the baby.
and she wasn't giving up on the baby,not now especially for the sake of her last chance of having a part and a piece of her one love.
this night could be dangerous but only she knows for sure....
then,as she walks by the house where he was shot,she's hears something in the bushes behind her..
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PostSubject: Re: The Baby   Thu Sep 27, 2007 4:53 pm

omg...was that the end..ur going to continue right..
right.......
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Applejellie



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PostSubject: Re: The Baby   Mon Oct 08, 2007 1:56 am

yeah....if you want me to,then here goes..

Shocked
she clutches her belly in protest of danger.
she knows someone is following her and she cannot oblige,not in her condition.her dead-lover taught her to defend herself,but she couldn't use her sweet skills now.especially now,with the only thing that matters is inside her and she is keen on protecting it.she turns around daringly,expecting someone to jump out at her.noone jumps out,and she waits patiently,expecting a fright.
10 minutes later and nothing still.she walks on an a lady comes out.
Avarin is silently taken aback...she stares in shock as the lady aproaches her.
the lady stops in front of her and tells her she knows who Avarin is and that she wants to help her.
Avarin does not know whether or not to trust this woman,but she looks kind and so Avarin asks her her name and where she got the idea she knew her....
the lady tells Avarin that she is the child's grandmother.
Avarin's long-lost mother.....she is not really dead.
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PostSubject: Re: The Baby   Mon Oct 08, 2007 10:32 pm

omg that's soo good..so suspenseful!
can't wait for an update
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herdarkerside



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PostSubject: Re: The Baby   Thu Oct 11, 2007 10:19 am

omg...
nice...this is entertaining..
expecially when ur bored in class..
cant wait for the nxt ch.
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Applejellie



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PostSubject: Re: The Baby   Thu Oct 11, 2007 8:16 pm

"....you...you leave me for all this time,and you expect me to just hug you and ask for an update on your great life without your child and husband?what the heck did you think that i would do?why did you leave me?"
Avarin just stared at her mother.
Cora,her mother,just laughed.
"i left because i was kidnapped.i joined this cult....they taught me the greater good would not go unpunished,and that it was possible to start over..i'm back for you and i see i have a grand-child on the way....you aren't exactly as skinny as you used to be ya know.....oh..and i ran into Jake's mother too...she got bad into drugs and thought the cult would help her get away from it.she told me Jake was trying to locate her to let her know she'd be a grandmother and to tell me i was gonna be one too.we just kinda got lost....but anyway.she's happily married to the man who leads us.and how IS Jake??is he okay? we haven't heard anything for two months."
Avarin slapped her..
"mother.Jake is DEAD.he died in a drive-by shooting and he was completely innocent.i left because i told dad and he didn't want me to have it.he tried to beat me and it i ran away....i threw one of his bottles at him though.and,he recently got into bringing crackheads to the house every night....i couldn't stay there."
Cora just stared ahead...."okay.well.we'll just bring you to the cult and you could get married to one of the brothers and he could help you raise your child.YAY!! you will love it there.simply LOVE it."
nooo....Avarin thought....this isn't happening.her mother had gone insane.completely insane...
"i need to see Jake's mother.i need to speak to her.how is she?she talk about me?wonder what she thinks about the baby?wonder what she'll say about the baby?oh,mom...i miss Jake so much..
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PostSubject: Re: The Baby   Fri Oct 12, 2007 12:38 pm

OMG...this is like a
novela..lol...
looove it!!
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PostSubject: Re: The Baby   Fri Oct 26, 2007 1:48 pm

Wow .. this story has this... something Very Happy... It gives thrill and touches deep... Yeah... i am intrigued what will happen next cyclops
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Applejellie



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PostSubject: Re: The Baby   Sun Oct 28, 2007 2:42 am

No
i'm sorry guys.
this IS in the short story section.
it can no longer continue.
it DOES however,
have ONE piece of art added to it.
Smile
i have decided to make it soo confusing on your part,
that all who read it shall make up your OWN ending.
what did Avarin decide to do?
did she join the cult with her psychotic mother?
what of her father?
and her baby.....
the main character is the baby,
you see.
you have to come up with something on your own.
if you want,
MAKE IT UP AND WRITE IT ON HERE FOR EVERYONE TO SEE....
i am most honored to let whoever they want to be as creative as possible.
good luck.
sunny
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PostSubject: Re: The Baby   Mon Oct 29, 2007 3:09 pm

uh uh oh ok Razz .... Errrrr... I dont have enough time and I would not know which one ending to choose.... but.. thanks for your a bit Shocked info Wink... Yeah... i think i would change it into long horror with good end... *And everyone lives long and happy* or whatever way it was Razz
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