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repentyourselfaway

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PostSubject: Burning Away   Wed Sep 26, 2007 3:05 pm

This is my attempt to sound emo..


Burning Away
The matches were within my reach
Easy access which was taunting me to have some fun
The emptiness of my boring life made me want to
Just craving a little excitement to spice up my life
Playing with the fire
Knowing Iíll just get burned
But I just had to give it a shot
And take the chance
Little did I know just dangerous it would be
Watching while the flames
Slowly burned away the only happiness I had left
Crushing my hopes and dreams
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PostSubject: Re: Burning Away   Wed Sep 26, 2007 3:11 pm

omg..i looove it.. I love you
every word..good!!amazing Exclamation Exclamation ..
how can u write this stuff without even feeling it..
ur just talented i guess..
u get a star for this one.. Like a Star @ heaven
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PostSubject: Re: Burning Away   Thu Sep 27, 2007 2:09 am

Shocked
omg..
i love this poem ALOT.
i usually don't fall for un-rhyming poetry,
but i have to give all four thumbs up for this one.

it captures everything into a little poem.
it tells a story through a metaphor.
those are always best ones.
amazing mind there.
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PostSubject: Re: Burning Away   Thu Sep 27, 2007 3:43 pm

Applejellie wrote:
Shocked
omg..
i love this poem ALOT.
i usually don't fall for un-rhyming poetry,
but i have to give all four thumbs up for this one.

it captures everything into a little poem.
it tells a story through a metaphor.
those are always best ones.
amazing mind there.

aww, thankss..i was trying to make it a metaphor..but i wasn't sure i made it sound that way well enough
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PostSubject: Re: Burning Away   Thu Sep 27, 2007 4:17 pm

Bravo your amazing
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PostSubject: Re: Burning Away   Fri Oct 12, 2007 1:44 pm

Very deep... and yeah... you rise it... Rhymes are nice decoration... but sometiems they are not so necessary... You prove it Very Happy
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