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repentyourselfaway

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PostSubject: Forgiveness   Tue Sep 25, 2007 3:13 pm

Forgiveness
I never meant to hurt you
Yet you did the same to me
I need you back in my life where you belong
You are my other half and complete me
So please forgive me, for both our sakes.

I donít know what else to do to win you back
I would do anything in the world for you though
Take me back and you wonít regret it
We could pretend this never happened
For itís only one annoying rock in the way of something great.


I don't really like this one, but..u guys can be the judge of that
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PostSubject: Re: Forgiveness   Tue Sep 25, 2007 3:15 pm

nice...loove it..
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PostSubject: Re: Forgiveness   Tue Sep 25, 2007 3:23 pm

coolbeans..or are u just saying that? hm... Neutral
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PostSubject: Re: Forgiveness   Tue Sep 25, 2007 3:32 pm

repentyourselfaway wrote:
coolbeans..or are u just saying that? hm... Neutral
omg..jeNNa..u kno i dont kiss anyones ass..
i meant what i said..n u kno i speak my mind..
if i didnt like it i wouldve not post anything
bout it..i loove ur writing..idk..i guess when i read ur stuff
its like..yeah..i have something in common with her..now
lol..i kno im dumb... Rolling Eyes
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PostSubject: Re: Forgiveness   Tue Sep 25, 2007 3:34 pm

okay, now i feel better pirat
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PostSubject: Re: Forgiveness   Wed Sep 26, 2007 3:17 am

i actually can relate to that...
love it...
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PostSubject: Re: Forgiveness   Fri Oct 12, 2007 2:28 pm

It look nice... Form of poem is kept... Maybe the last one sentence... hmmm... I just reminded how often I have porblems with ending something... but still its great... specially when its real so other readers can relate to it Very Happy
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